Draft for our Script and Storyboard

We've now started making our Preliminary Task for AS Media. We decided that the draft storyboard would be made by Matt and Tyler and the script will be made by me and Sunny. We've now made both of these and we also decided that me and Sunny will be acting, Matt and Tyler will be doing the camerawork and I'll be doing the editing with input from everyone. Here is our draft storyboard and draft script:

We will now decide if we're happy with the storyboard and script and come up with a final of both so that we are ready to film our preliminary and get straight into editing.

Feel free to leave any comments and tell use what we need to improve on. All of your feedback is appreciated.